Проверьте сочинение. надо! people with disabilities. i admire him . i'm glad they don't give up. they continue to live,to do sports and doing what they love . currently, people with disabilities can accomplish more than ordinary people. they have their own dream to which they aspire.they have a desire to prove to the world that life does not stop there.healthy people spend their lives in phones.there are many people with disabilities who have achieved success,such as beethoven,stephen hawking and bernard..on saturday i went to a concert dedicated to city day.and i've seen awards athletes of the year and 2 of them were disabled.they represented russia at the european championship in archery.irina russian won gold,while igor meshkov took 2nd place.i am proud of them.
I'm glad THAT they don't give up - думаю, так будет правильней.
А так все нормально, мною других ошибок не обнаружено:)